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十三郎(多媒體廢作人)
感謝支持！關於你用「叛神軍團」來介紹作品的部份，其實可以嘗試再簡單一點，不是挑剔你的參加作品，只是想你花多點心思在自己的作品之中。

「冗長」是很多長篇作品的致命傷，要學懂扼要，又不失意思才是佳作。
6 years agoReply
蔓越泱湫
感謝大大願意抽空來看我的作品，我會嘗試跟著大大的意見進行修改😅，還請希望大大有空可以多多指點🙏🙏
6 years agoReply
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