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簡潔
用典的填詞，真懷念呢~
霧搖兄今次的用詞含蓄，卻不失深度，意境淡雅。
7 years agoReply
零兒
話說那個“伫“該不會是“佇”吧....？
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
異體字吧…？習慣用這個XD
7 years agoReply
零兒
在最後深入了些微的情感呢owo``
詞風上是有非常強烈的婉約感，意境非常的柔美，用字這次是有偏平凡挑選，但也不失風采。用典非常的廣闊且精準，這方面霧搖真是非常擅長呢～～
話說我覺得清平樂其實算很順的了，自己是滿喜歡的owo``
那麼第二首就不多說什麼了～～
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
話說…這樣子有押韻了吧？相反粤語便超不押XD(哭)很難兼顧唉XD語言好奇怪喔！
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
@霧搖山亭,也十分感謝零兒大大如此認真用心的評論(感動！)！
7 years agoReply
零兒
感想稍後，首先押韻....國語完全沒對到....但既然是粵語押韻那也沒辦法了owo**
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
是嗎？國語差…抱歉…再改改XD
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
google翻譯查國語XD這樣有押了吧XD
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
再改了點…應該全押了！但這…這樣搞下去…粤語便完全不押XD(兼顧兩者很難唉XD)
7 years agoReply
零兒
@霧搖山亭,押韻ok
7 years agoReply
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