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小邁
本來以為只是中英夾雜，結果還有粵語口語嗎xd 感覺統一一下會比較好，hot boy倒是可以保留。
另外感覺有些句子是病句，主語也不夠清楚，故事目前比較像大綱，後面會再翻修和擴寫嗎？
2 weeks agoReply
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