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原子能

主角穿過走廊卻突然位移到第七號艙，以及手自動寫出非自願字句很有驚悚感，但主角不太立體。
我的小說也有這個問題，我認為是因為作者是使用情節推動，因此忽略了人物，三章讀下來，都是以事件為主體，雖然有驚悚感，但會有代入感不足的感覺。
4 days agoReply
岩瑛
對☺️我會繼續努力，寫得更好
4 days agoReply
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