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林谷龍
克萊小組還是投票贊成就，將案情繼續往下追查下去，這倒是正義之組。
5 months agoReply
艾米莉
大大好，以下是一點小小的感想。
感覺上文本的對話偏多，對角色的外貌描寫略少，因此看到角色名沒有聯想到其外貌，以致畫面感有點薄。暫時故事像是群演，沒有聚焦於主角身上。
世界觀著墨較少。在文中多次提及芝加哥，故事背景應該是國外？
5 months agoReply
冬季貓貓蟲
是的，剛開始是查案的部分，所以對於角色外貌的描寫偏少，後面會慢慢加上。是比較由大群縮小到個人（主角）

故事背景外星，但還沒到那部分XD 
5 months agoReply
蠢作者魚魚
感覺歐森之後會被盯上～實在太好看了 嘻嘻
9 months agoReply
冬季貓貓蟲
嘿嘿，沒錯！
9 months agoReply
原子能
哈哈哈哈歐森被大家吐槽臉太好看那段笑死我了！『沉魚落雁』，韋恩你國文老師在哭啊！確立了「繼續調查」的目標後，立刻兵分兩路，給出了明確的行動綱領，這使得故事節奏毫不拖沓。
9 months agoReply
冬季貓貓蟲
韋恩的語文能力堪憂……
9 months agoReply
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