My favorite chapter so far.Minor points:"to some kind of cool, metallic table"This line kind of takes away the sinister atmosphere and sense of danger or urgency you're setting up. Like she had the time to describe the things around her as "cool" despite her state. Choice of words. "he threw he head back" - his "Ever law" - every "Girl, we are past the point of giving. From here on out, I am merely going to take what I want." - A+ line. Iconic. Really felt the sinister quality of the Executive. He's my fave now.
"he threw he head back" - his
"Ever law" - every
"Girl, we are past the point of giving. From here on out, I am merely going to take what I want." - A+ line. Iconic. Really felt the sinister quality of the Executive. He's my fave now.