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夜沐
救命啊～救命啊～要沉船了！慢著，飛船拋錨算是墜機還是沉船呢？

莎莎是個好孩子，含金量正在提升！！
1 week agoReply
楠都月
比較多對話都沒標明是誰說，只能從內容猜測，會比較令讀者有點難以理解。少女以她的力量拯救所有人，是一個不錯的展示實力的開頭。 劇情之間某些分鏡會有少少斷裂感，會挺搞不清到底發生什麼事。 🤔
7 months agoReply
原子能
莎莎這個「謎樣的少女」直接用人體魔力代替飛船儲能槽，這瘋狂的舉動太燃了，但對身體的負荷描寫得很到位。
8 months agoReply
靈貍莊缺看板娘
差點也要把人給燃沒了
8 months agoReply
原子能
@靈貍莊缺看板娘,哈哈
8 months agoReply
星雨夜
眼拙，看不出來銜接那裡有問題。最多應該是語氣上的用詞，以及帶來的氛圍感。
1 year agoReply
靈貍莊缺看板娘
你這不是都說出來了嗎😭😭😭
1 year agoReply
星雨夜
@靈貍莊缺看板娘,不會啦！再斟酌一下，以你的功力應該沒問題的啦！
1 year agoReply
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