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Miss Anderson
I love the story so far! But I'm just wondering who is serving them drinks when they are under age? I just notice you mention a bartender in the previous chapter. Also, the whereabouts of Amber's parents with such a huge party. And just small questions like that... A minor technicality, but still important to explain, I think could allow the story to go a little smoother:)
Minerva Teagan
You're absolutely right. I understand the story lacks a lot of details that might be minor but still important enough. I'll note that down as one of the many things I need to fix when I finally start editing the book. Thank you for your feedback; suggestions like these are truly appreciated. ☺️
Miss Anderson
@Minerva Teagan, no prob, really enjoying the story!
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