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killer
幼稚園小朋友會比中指,好可怕......
3 years agoReply
snowball
這部很辛辣，因為我當初是想寫R18血腥打戲但不想讓原本的主力作品變成R18調性或太血腥，所以寫出這部，但人物關係跟很多細節沒有拿捏得很好。這部基調也算一部爽文，主要就是看泰迪熊S人保護女主角。不好意思可能有些部分會讓人看得很痛苦，劇本規劃沒有很完整
3 years agoReply
鈴鈴卷
話說一章的字數有點太多了，想吐槽卻礙於篇幅太長WWW
3 years agoReply
鈴鈴卷
慧嘉的行為雖然很帥，但泡泡糖是可以吞的嗎www
你們除了多綁到一個小孩，還綁到佛萊迪午夜驚魂的熊了(X
牙齒被打斷應該要痛暈了WWW我覺得可以說是門牙，如果事後排那感覺下顎應該直接飛了，而且這邊有個BUG，主角幼稚園，計算手的長度來說她應該搶不到大人口袋的鑰匙
3 years agoReply
snowball
阿呀 當初寫的時候沒注意到長度 他又不是魯夫XDD
3 years agoReply
snowball
我平常打拳下顎牙齒差點掉下來最後都沒暈 主要是因為打擊點沒有影響到大腦的晃動 這一段算是拿自己的經驗來參考
3 years agoReply
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