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十三郎(多媒體廢作人)
(以下是我十分個人的想法)
要注意一下，表面攻勢是重點，但相對之後被攻陷的反應及內心細節是百合的精髓！！(啊... ...不好意思，我上身了)

我覺得百合的輕浪漫不可以用熱血的節奏來發展。

另外，我看不憧1、4、3的意思。

ALEX大師，我正等待享用你的百合！別要人家失望~~呵呵呵~~

關於這個故事的名字：

penana.com/story/48984/%E5%87%BA%E7%89%88%E4%BD%9C%E8%80%85-%E5%9B%9B%E5%9B%9E%E9%81%B8%E7%A8%BF%E5%A4%A7%E6%8C%91%E6%88%B0-%E7%AC%AC%E4%B8%80%E5%9B%9E/issue/38
6 years agoReply
Alex(阿歷)
我也在努力尋找節奏，雖然結局很早就想好是接近悲劇，但未來真的完結的時候應該會大修特修，現在也只是想像結局而沒有實際去寫兩人的心境發展。                                                                 
對了，由於第一章有二千多字，在刪減途中不小心忘了改掉號碼😅。
大師之名不敢當🙈
6 years agoReply
十三郎(多媒體廢作人)
@Alex(阿歷),

啊！如此！經你這樣一說，在第三回的題目，突然有另一種想法~~~呵呵呵~~
6 years agoReply
Alex(阿歷)
第一章寫了二千多字，硬是壓縮到不夠一千字。想想都可怕
6 years agoReply
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