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森月日下
可以呀，穿越到历史成为路易16的孩子，这题材可以的，文笔也顺畅，看的舒服，但可能还是需要在修改一下，至少文一章定在2000字，把整部核心写在第一章前五百字，也就是救父亲，要有钩子，抓住读者。

主要还是整篇剧情不太完整，抓不住呀，这文是可以的。

总结：养猪，自己再去啄磨剧情后续和前三章怎磨写比较好。
1 year agoReply
感謝手下留情😝

會繼續努力的💪🏻
1 year agoReply
森月日下
@俗子,你这章开头比你前面发的好看多了，这文是可以的。
1 year agoReply
@森月日下,謝謝！
1 year agoReply
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