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茗那
這是改過的版本對嗎？
變更了結局，他最終戰勝了噬人的焚風，可惜我還是沒有找到你想表達的祝福。覺得有點難懂或是需要幫忙的話歡迎和我討論看看 ꒰ঌ( ⌯' '⌯)໒꒱
3 weeks agoReply
HM
我覺得人總是會被什麼東西捆綁住（例如愛、渴望），也曾經淪陷過，但他不甘心被吞噬，所以他親手解決掉絆住他的事物，這篇呈現出來的祝福是，就算被困在逆境中，依舊有一線生機可以逃脫
3 weeks agoReply
茗那
嗯～那我可以理解成是和前篇一樣的，比較像是以第一人稱視角在說話，是送出祝福，而非講述祝福對嗎？
如果沒錯的話，那就修改ok 囉！
感謝你的耐心分享 ( Ꙭ)⸝ෆ
3 weeks agoReply
HM
這個意思沒錯～
謝謝你的講評꒰⁠⑅⁠ᵕ⁠༚⁠ᵕ⁠꒱⁠˖⁠♡
3 weeks agoReply
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