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雪貂之主
被發現了這篇其實沒設過世界觀和我不會寫高潮的事www

最後對峙的情節的確是我駕馭不住所以很多都沒有描述，想問如果要寫那幾派人馬的話，你會想看什麼？例如說多點實驗室那邊的情景？還是黑道頭領趕過來的情形？
2 years agoReply
浪月新子
@雪貂之主, 有兩個地點，我會（只是例如）說在錯的地點擾攘完一輪才發現他不在那，再帶到主角在門前遇到點阻滯再衝出去之類的
2 years agoReply
雪貂之主 sponsored 1000coins for Issue 28!
謝評！
2 years agoReply
浪月新子

@雪貂之主
2 years agoReply
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