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Comments - 【搞事】讓只有一點血的戰鬥狂讀者來翻書是否搞錯了什麼？（投稿區域） | Penana
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Comments - 【搞事】讓只有一點血的戰鬥狂讀者來翻書是否搞錯了什麼？（投稿區域）
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Happy喵
我覺得寫得不錯。

撇除一些字的用法問題，後面情感爆發是很有力，視角大多在凌齊上，也不會有過分混亂的情況出現，戰鬥的速度感和打擊感很強，證明寫法到位，算得上是少見的佳作了。
1 year agoReply
夢語
感謝喵大的回饋！
經過在下重新審視，文中的確有部分用字可以再做調整，非常感謝您給予的意見！
1 year agoReply
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