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寂魚
評分:B-
故事的流暢性讀來有點卡頓，不夠連貫的感覺。
老實說，對我來說非常不容易閱讀與理解，於是我便將其視為是有待加強的那種程度。
理應在編排上再多做修正。故此給予B-的評價。
4 months agoReply
咖飛
感謝評語與評分~
4 months agoReply
寂魚
@咖飛,抱歉 因為要帶兩個兒子，我半年沒上來這邊了，竟請見諒
4 months agoReply
凝雨
評分：Ｂ

本來一開始我覺得挺好看，但到了結尾我總覺得怪怪的，可能是因為視點比較混亂的關係，我差點以為兔子變成了「小三」呢！所以兔子最後往哪兒了?
9 months agoReply
咖飛
感謝評語與評分～
我當時設計的確兔子是「小三」，沒有寫的很清楚
4 months agoReply
凝雨
@咖飛, 原來如此！
4 months agoReply
是南末吶！
評分：B

失憶還真是分手的好辦法（x
9 months agoReply
咖飛
 感謝評語與評分～
4 months agoReply
紫玖島
評分：B-
評語：覺得化身的想法不錯，但視角有點混亂，家裡又突然出現在咖啡廳？可能要重新順一下比較適合喔～
9 months agoReply
咖飛
感謝評語與建議～
看了好幾次終於發現問題(˘･_･˘)
9 months agoReply
戀嬿紅唇
評Ｂ

小三好突然阿＠＠
9 months agoReply
咖飛
謝謝評語與評分〜
原本想給女主角一個驚嚇（？
沒有寫得很好(～￣▽￣)～
9 months agoReply
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