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寂魚
評分:B-

我大致上將文章反覆看了兩遍。
第一次閱讀時，是看不懂的。
第二次再看，大致上應該理解了，那個故事的主角應該是的臥底之類的。
在用字上如"隨後"這詞出現得太多，在故事上用語也一再重複，故此我覺得是寫得有待加強的。
4 months agoReply
凝雨
評分：Ｂ

感覺是一個故事的序幕，或者是一個介紹人物的篇章，故事性略為不足呢~
9 months agoReply
是南末吶！
評分：B-

不太懂設定是什麼
9 months agoReply
紫玖島
評分：B
評語：覺得如果有一段形容一下飼養員是怎樣的人會更加具體，例如是很殘忍？很強？怎樣的強？可能把攻堅的一段挪過來寫會更好～
9 months agoReply
小豬瑩瑩
評B，故事完整，但是描寫人物不夠具體，故評B
9 months agoReply
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