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Comments - 《蝶殺的連鎖》短篇小說創作比賽 | Penana
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雨田明
評語：
這種結局處理固然有感官效果，但故事推進太跳躍，須有更多的鋪排和心理描寫。
7 years agoReply
故言之
感謝原作者願意在百忙之中特意給出建議。
這真是一個很有收穫的活動。
7 years agoReply
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100 Pena 幣已經派送給你哦！
7 years agoReply
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