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kikii sponsored 500coins for Issue 24!
7 months agoReply
嵐斕
謝謝打賞\(⁠≧⁠▽⁠≦⁠)/
7 months agoReply
kikii
首先，非常感謝嵐姐的點評！偶爾，我也會閱讀自己前面的章節，以進行一些語句上的修改，但劇情呈現上的細節問題，作為什麼都知道的作者果然很難察覺XDD 這些我都會後續進行修改。

順便稍微回應一下關於#1的問題。我的本意是想要呈現卡爾的麻木和沈默卻滔天的怒意，因此也沒有像其他章節一樣直接挑明了角色的情緒波動，想要給讀者一些留白的空間。不過，如果顯得過於平淡的話，我會挑一些初稿沒用到的心理描寫，去找一個能同時呈現這兩種效果的平衡。

在這裡，我也很感謝嵐姐對我的認可！再次感謝嵐姐~
7 months agoReply
嵐斕
kikii大大的文筆真的很細膩
期待修改後的成果(⁠.⁠ ⁠❛⁠ ⁠ᴗ⁠ ⁠❛⁠.⁠)b
7 months agoReply
嵐斕
@kikii
7 months agoReply
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