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陽壽木魚
註

（小男孩是超級後面的伏筆，前面確實算是⋯聽眾啦）

（然後確實是有一點點科幻加佔比較多的奇幻）
1 year agoReply
菜根
如果小男孩是伏筆，那改的時候要花心思。
取決於他是怎樣的伏筆來做修訂。
目前看下去感覺不上不下，所以很詭異。
1 year agoReply
陽壽木魚
感謝建議～差點以為會被全部噴爆，嚇死

劇情流暢度⋯唉，我以為節奏必須快一點（之前被黃金三章搞到心理陰影了）讀者才會想看下去⋯

我會再慢慢修改行文的，再次感謝您的建議！！
1 year agoReply
菜根
OK~編輯模式不會噴太多0.0節奏快一點是刪除水分很多的劇情。
1 year agoReply
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