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揆西 sponsored 500coins for Issue 23!
3 months agoReply
揆西
感謝閱讀！確實戰鬥比重少了些！
這部的設定偏科幻點，有超能力，也有刀劍槍，也有夢中殺人的。
所有當初寫的時候，還在考慮怎麼寫比較好。
櫃子那段，前一章被斷電，所以漆黑，聽見櫃子聲音就開槍。

面具男跑走是因為庭園的高手甦醒了。

如果純戰鬥的話，還真得很少，可能二十六章的前半段算是。

總之，感謝閱讀啦！！
3 months agoReply
車理小龜
因為你篇幅有點長，所以導致看起來他們打了很久貨櫃，可以試試強調一下其實只過了很短時間或者試試敵人停下來觀察（多一個動作）之類的描寫去令這場戰鬥的速度感或互動性比較強
3 months agoReply
車理小龜
@揆西
3 months agoReply
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