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夜臨 Yalin Hayami
同樣是莉莉可的情感段落可以再調整一下。我這邊僅是插入一句愛爾的描述，支撐逐漸不見的畫面感。
1 year agoReply
阿秋Aki
非常好，我一看到二話不說就同意修改了，真的是很棒的添加！
1 year agoReply
世水
莉莉可應該是自信心不足的關係啦～

不過坦白說愛爾那一句尖銳台詞讓我有點嚇到！那個語氣😅
目前為止他的形象一直是好好先生～ 主角的形象更立體了☺️

我感覺哈 黛安娜未來會有吃鱉的時候，就是那種身上神裝都沒有時，她被強敵壓制的橋段😆
1 year agoReply
阿秋Aki
愛爾會有點生氣也是有道理的，不過感覺更多是疑惑。

黛安娜的問題之後會越來越明顯XD
1 year agoReply
世水
@阿秋Aki,開場越囂張跋扈的人，越後面越會踢到鐵板的定律XD
1 year agoReply
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