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Atarah Asher
I love the detail of the kids being kids. Similarly, all shenanigans are entertaining shenanigans! The emotional vulnerability of Noel is displayed in this chapter quite well. Elezebeth's hesitation speaks louder than her words and that is a nice detail. Good job!😊
Mia Flame
Awww thank you!!! I am flattered that someone I don't even know is willing to read and give feedback on my story!! It means the world! <3
Atarah Asher
YW! 😊@Mia Flame,
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