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語者
謝謝嵐姐的書評，只能說每一段都是我沒有發現的XDD
我本來以為會點出我有意識到的問題，結果點出來的大部分都是我沒有意識到的問題

密謀那個老實說，真的是頗難改🤣🤣可能就留著這麼一個邏輯瑕疵，看能不能後續再做補強了，然後頭痛真的是伏筆，所以就不改了

也謝謝嵐姐有點出漸入佳境的部分，老實說我本人往前翻也覺得前面不管文筆節奏都沒有控制得那麼好，會往前修，但只能說越寫越進步，現在的我看前面寫的也有些不滿意

嵐姐點出的bug 中十個應該有8個我都蠻在意的XDD
非常感謝
7 months agoReply
嵐斕
有幫到你真是太好了\(⁠≧⁠▽⁠≦⁠)/
7 months agoReply
嵐斕
@語者
7 months agoReply
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