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看完16~18這三篇的整體感想是 基本上沒什麼太大的吐槽點 因為都是在交代故事背景跟狀況 並帶出未來可能會有所交集的虎族 或許還有其他獸人族 (故事本身的設定除非問題點太大或是邏輯有問題不然是不能吐槽的)
還有 你都帶出元素力可以用於燈火當中 這邊就可以稍微帶一下這個元素力到底在幹嘛的 一直賣關子不講有時會有反效果 還有那個黑暗力量由一個車夫口中說出來反而會給人感覺眾人皆知 這部分資訊應該隱密些 至少由S35或組織成員口中說出來會更適合 你讓車夫講出來感覺好像這件事就跟路邊的八卦一樣 公開的資訊
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