I mean, at least the dad’s getting his daughter prepared for any danger. That’s good, though also really scary.
Couple things I wanna point out: - When a dialogue is a statement (doesn’t end with an exclamation, hyphen, or question mark) it’s more preferable to use a comma instead of a period. I.e.: “Morning, Nora,” I said.
- in one spot you used “you’re” instead of “your” (the sentence was referring to something a character was possessing, therefore “your” would’ve been correct.)
That’s all though, and I still enjoyed this chapter. Hope this helped! 🤗
Couple things I wanna point out:
- When a dialogue is a statement (doesn’t end with an exclamation, hyphen, or question mark) it’s more preferable to use a comma instead of a period.
I.e.:
“Morning, Nora,” I said.
- in one spot you used “you’re” instead of “your” (the sentence was referring to something a character was possessing, therefore “your” would’ve been correct.)
That’s all though, and I still enjoyed this chapter. Hope this helped! 🤗