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Littlexdancer

Thank you so much for the feedback! I love to hear it and it is really useful. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

4 years agoReply

Welcome! Looking forward to the next chapter :)

4 years agoReply

I mean, at least the dad’s getting his daughter prepared for any danger. That’s good, though also really scary.

Couple things I wanna point out:
- When a dialogue is a statement (doesn’t end with an exclamation, hyphen, or question mark) it’s more preferable to use a comma instead of a period.
I.e.:
“Morning, Nora,” I said.

- in one spot you used “you’re” instead of “your” (the sentence was referring to something a character was possessing, therefore “your” would’ve been correct.)

That’s all though, and I still enjoyed this chapter. Hope this helped! 🤗

4 years agoReply

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