This is actually really good but why did he have to die? I was full on imagining a really happy ending and then bam! I'm like woah, he's dead. But it's a good story
I want him to die but I also want him to stay awake for a few more hours to speak to the girl... So after he said his last words, let's just say his heart stopped beating.
@Jeniffer, Haha, but just remember you write for your own self not for others. So it doesn't matter if I or anyone else isn't a fan of it; as long as you like it then no one has an say in what you write.
@Jeniffer, Yeah that's not good. Who cares what people think. It's your story, your rules. You can write it however you please. Anyhow, keep up the great work, you're doing really good. :)
It makes it more amazing xD
I can't imagine it another way though. Like the ending you've made is probably the most effective. Though keep up the great work! :)
I am very glad that you do think it's the best way to end it, because I don't want to start over again x.x