Story is very good yet the girl gots her eye sight JUST by meeting the boy, this is something that make the reader bore. It should be something like she meets him when he saves her from the bad guys or something. And she suddenly doesn't get her eye sight but she slowly but gradually gets it. Like I mean they became friends and slowly the mc starts to see things and she is very joyed but before her eye sight comes she get head aek and stuff. Then she could know the people's secret not on head but from her brain. Like her brain is kinda mind reader or something.
As a reader I told these things. I hope you would change them.
that's very interesting, thank you for that, I don't read a lot of books so I'm not as an expert in plot making. I might put it in in the final draft, thank you for that :D
As a reader I told these things. I hope you would change them.