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零兒
果然就是霧搖的詞，用字依舊綺麗柔美也不失精準，繡花、澹雲都是很美麗的詞語呢！
整首寫景非常有畫面，彷彿親臨現場呢owo~
不過啊，可以試著讓讀者看清楚句讀，排版問題罷了～～
7 years agoReply
霧飄山亭
先感謝評語(感動)，但看了零兒大大的又看了看自己的…總覺得自己並不善長佈局…總是想甚麼便寫甚麼，沒有遞進之感…相反以你的《海月調》為例，上闕先寫水，再把水擴大成海，下闕以海襯月，海中倒月襯出月之華…總覺得你能做到層層遞進，把情感升華！！
7 years agoReply
零兒
@霧搖山亭,一切都是不小心的罷了030....
7 years agoReply
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