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EndlessMidnightMoon

I liked the flow, the surprises and the intensity of the situation. The flow is smooth although I will have liked a stronger ending here. I do like how Evren has to choose but I do feel that it isn't strong enough or things hasn't gotten so bad that Evren only has a moment at most to make up his mind.

However, I'm slightly confused as to who Cal is. Is he a random stranger that Evren barely knows or is it otherwise and he knows Cal.

But otherwise, this has managed to keep me reading without me dropping off at any point. Otherwise, well done.

7 years agoReply

Tenshi no Yami

Hey,

Thank you for your comments and thoughts! This was hust an excerpt from a story I did some time back on Fictionpress. The story is called 'Negative' and I dont want to give anything away but I've started moving that story to Penana. The first few chapters are up but the finished story is currently residing on Fictionpress. The comments you made, some can be addressed in the first few chapters. Other than that, thanks for reading!

7 years agoReply

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