Insanely chaotic in a sense, I'd say! Though I could follow the story and it isn't all that confusing. I said it before that I didn't know what to expect and it showed again in part two as well. In a good way, ofcourse. I mean, whoa what? The mum was supposed to be on her side yet she was the evil culprit in scheming against her daughter! Still, I thought it was a good twist, nevertheless. 

One of the things that makes it pretty intense was when Angie described the place something along the meaning of closed off, and I thought I felt the feeling of being trapped. 
Definitely dislike the feeling but I thought it was a good job on you for being able to both describe it in a way that could convey such feelings from it. Glad that she managed to get out of that hell of confinement but if only Angie could have delivered some blow to the dude...haha that would be something. 

All in all, I like the story and how you described the setting and character. I didn't notice any major grammatical errors though I might have seen one. It was a slight one though so it was easily overlooked. By the way, I hope I don't sound silly for asking this but what does the part where Jane "mumbles nines" mean? 🙂

what mother angie had...... :/