Heeeeeeeyyy. I suggested edits for your book. I did this because I actually like it. So.... You'll notice just a few marks.. But what I did was color some sentences that look like they could really be shortened or rewritten for clarification. Just a heads up.
You have so many characters here, I might get lost for a while. Haha, kidding. But I believe as I follow this story I will understand everything. It's like being introduced to many people at a time, tbh. Fun.
Again and again, you are really talented. I don't know how you put it all in details. It's like, you really live in such a place that you can describe it here.
Again and again, you are really talented. I don't know how you put it all in details. It's like, you really live in such a place that you can describe it here.