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我為九斗米折腰
欸？！這章好短？話說這難道是BL文？！
4 days agoReply
芙
不算，但會留嗑點給人看
4 days agoReply
時音
媽媽那些不該出現的小說該不會是BL小說吧哈哈哈
4 days agoReply
漫羽雪晴
幕禮給人感覺有點像是烙印勇士裡面的古力菲斯
該不會後面出現什麼反轉劇情吧
期待期待
1 week agoReply
飄呀飄的羽毛
好突然的BL展開啊～哈哈哈
1 week agoReply
原子能
「那怎麼了！」乙夏不滿地瞪著一旁的女僕，對方正目不轉睛地盯著掛軸看。「我崇拜他不行嗎？」「我沒有說不行啊，少爺。」女僕無辜地眨眼，「我只是覺得他挺帥的。我當然沒有要跟您搶的意思！請您不要誤會！」
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這一段有點不順，女僕看著掛軸，主角沒來由的「那怎麼了！」「我崇拜他不行嗎？」沒有前因後果，感覺上是作者硬塞進主角嘴裡的，如果想表乙夏對慕禮及執鞭者的響往，前面已經有多處說明，這裡應該用更深化或更內心的呈現方式。
1 week agoReply
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