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Kokiri-Hylian-Hero

That was intense, the guy spent two years leading that ship, and then the committee took it away for their little experiment...I can't help but wonder what would happen next.

9 years agoReply

Banko

I wrote this off the cuff not a lot of thought gone into it but having had a proper look at it today im going to tidy it up a bit and perhaps expand it into a bigger story thanks for your comment and glad it has left you wondering there could be room for a good story to come out of this

9 years agoReply

Kokiri-Hylian-Hero

@Banko, No problem. :-}

9 years agoReply

The Virtual Shadow

Brilliant, Interesting and made me think wrong (by the twist was gold.)

What a way to do a concept of sending all types of pods to spread, and tricking the guy, being unsure. I really think this was great.

9 years agoReply

Banko

Glad you liked it i will try and tidy it up a bit as iv seen a few things i could improve

9 years agoReply

Banko

sorry for any typing errors or spelling mistakes

9 years agoReply

Cherrywoodandwalnut

It's okay! Minor errors here and there with punctuation and grammar but your story is solid. I didn't expect the ending at all! Really cool, I hope you'll keep on developing it :D

9 years agoReply

Banko

@Cherrywoodandwalnut, my biggest weekness grammer im trying to improve

9 years agoReply

Cherrywoodandwalnut

@Banko, you can try apps like Grammarly, they help with spelling and grammar or run your stuff through spell-checker on Microsoft Word/even google docs has a spell-checker. You could also try looking for other people to read your writing so that they can give comments and help you improve as well!

9 years agoReply

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