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魔幻蕈菇
小小建議參考，一般姣好還是形容女生居多，雖然不想性別刻板但因為還是帶個女字，男性身材可以考慮比如矯健、勁瘦、精壯、性感等形容詞

以上回饋，你看完我就刪啦
2 years agoReply
深海大鳳梨
好耶！留著留著沒關係
我原本也很猶豫用詞，一開始是想說呈現一種比較媚態的男性形象，不過如果不太適用我馬上來改一下 XD

感謝蘑菇反饋😍😍😍
2 years agoReply
魔幻蕈菇
@深海大鳳梨,我有想過是不是葵的氣質比較陰柔所以你選用這個，那要不要試著在動作表現那個媚態配合體態，或是在氣質上做一點描寫？
2 years agoReply
深海大鳳梨
@魔幻蕈菇,好！！！我增加了一些側面描寫，又增加了字數嘿嘿嘿一舉兩得🤺

蘑菇很適合當編輯啊給的建議都好實用🥺（緊抱大腿
2 years agoReply
魔幻蕈菇
@深海大鳳梨,我是啊🤣🤣🤣

只是不在出版業是在非營利組織裡，都是處理議題文啊捏。
2 years agoReply
深海大鳳梨
@魔幻蕈菇,啊啊啊啊我原本不知道！！！誤打誤撞😆太好了～再次感謝蘑菇
2 years agoReply
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