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先說一下，感謝參加~｡:.ﾟヽ(*´∀`)ﾉﾟ.:｡

後面是我的一些些建議，瘋可能有一點，但因為我覺得就這篇看下來打架戲份比較多，所以把瘋的比例給遮蓋住了？

創挑幾乎都是短篇文章，要寫長也不是不行，只是可能要像這次創挑中的第9章、第11章、第17章那樣，是因為有前面的設定需要做鋪陳，所以寫的有些長

但這篇因為被打戲覆蓋，所以讓人覺得沒到很瘋？可能直接取後半段文章會比較好這樣Www

當然寫作是要慢慢累積的，祝你不忘初心寫作順利｡:.ﾟヽ(*´∀`)ﾉﾟ.:｡
1 year agoReply
不會哭的諾可曲
☆*:.｡. o(≧▽≦)o .｡.:*☆好耶，謝謝
1 year agoReply
不會哭的諾可曲
沒有啦，怕可能會看不懂我在OS一些什麼，就寫的清楚點了
1 year agoReply
@不會哭的諾可曲,我是覺得打戲可以刪掉一點點，比較不會有離題問題Www
1 year agoReply
不會哭的諾可曲
@源魚,(￣▽￣"")（汗）👌
1 year agoReply
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