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月一
第十四章前段好像和第十三章有些重複到了~
話說作者大大的文筆真的好讚 很多的對話都讓人看得很順 簡短又有意義這樣
感覺讀過很多書哈哈！
1 month agoReply
春風如意不如你
想寫個前後呼應的感覺，請問你覺得有哪個部分衝突到了呢，我應該可以改一下

1 month agoReply
月一
嗯嗯仔細看是有不同 如果是你的想法我覺得就好 

問月雪的雪是哪個字的部分寫了兩次 這個地方可能比較突兀 也可能是我看不懂而已😀
1 month agoReply
春風如意不如你
@春風如意不如你,這第十四章確實得改，因為感覺是我複製上文要往下的時候不小心重複寫到了XD


1 month agoReply
春風如意不如你
@月一,更新了順便增添了幾筆，請過目～
1 month agoReply
月一
@春風如意不如你,嗯嗯 了解~ 氛圍感很真實 節奏不緊不慢也會想繼續看下去 有不懂的地方會再來發問(⁠^⁠^⁠)
1 month agoReply
春風如意不如你
@月一,沒問題!隨時可以發問，因為有時候真的會有上下文衝突的問題，通常於銜接的時候會出問題
1 month agoReply
淡趣兄弟
@春風如意不如你,不愧是我們本月新星，愛了愛了
1 month agoReply
春風如意不如你
@淡趣兄弟,你牛了都
1 month agoReply
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