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永玄
感謝書評！！你提到的確實都是我猶豫過的點，開頭使用師弟視角也確實蠻冒險的，但一開始考慮到也想寫明師尊跟師弟的感情所以還是有冒險了一下
視角部分我後續也有注意！後續多半都是以女主為主，應該比較不會有這個問題，至於師尊那段確實是作一下聽撒嬌而已XD
感謝你的建議！關於前期師尊的人設可能不太穩定的地方我再看看怎麼調整會更好！
1 year agoReply
嵐斕
永玄大大的作品很優秀，只是我在吹毛求疵而已，加油！
1 year agoReply
嵐斕
@永玄
1 year agoReply
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