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嵐斕
@陽壽木魚
10 months agoReply
陽壽木魚
感謝點評！
這部我算是寫了有一段時間了⋯所以句式上看來果然有點問題⋯
之前回看的時候也有發現一些邏輯瑕疵，感謝嵐姊把那些點都提出來！
然後確實劇情是有點趕啦⋯之後打算正式完結之後再重新改一遍（那可能要等我上大學了：）
10 months agoReply
嵐斕
@陽壽木魚,學業加油！期待作品修改後完結的成品！
10 months agoReply
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