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Andrew Knight

YES.
You took a risk here having her father show up right after her conversation with Viktor about him. I'd like it to pay off, but the story feels suddenly rushed, and I know you're dying to tell us more, but don't jeapordize the pace for this

10 years agoReply

Frances

Haha don't worry it's not, there's a lot more I want to see happen. Anyway, I felt it was time for a change up in pace.

but out of curiosity, what felt rushed?

10 years agoReply

Andrew Knight

I think it was the combination of "The best thing my father ever did for us was go to war," and then the moment of, SURPRISE! Look who's back!
If that makes any sense haha

10 years agoReply

Frances

Ah! Ok. Yeah I can see that. I just wanted to make sure the audience remembered that he had been captured as a POW. Did you remember without the reminder?

10 years agoReply

Andrew Knight

I can't say I did. I did remember that he had gone to war, but not that he was captured. My bad!

10 years agoReply

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