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素素
事情暪不住啦！怎麼辦呢？
快點給我更新啊，我太在意喇！
9 months agoReply
表達手法非常有代入感，

我彷彿代入了這位女主角的處境，

但可以加入一些渲染手法加強效果，例如：

最尾，

心臟砰砰作響，心臟的每一下彈跳也彷彿要撞穿胸膛，躍出體外。
9 months agoReply
覺非(Benny Chan)
謝謝建議, 我馬上修改一下 !
9 months agoReply
好看👍🏻

坐等更新！
9 months agoReply
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