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再讀了第二次，
後面好像有發現小調整，

'''安排一切''
那一段，看起來是後續加上的。
1 year agoReply
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另外，難過與悲傷作為前置提示，
卻又很巧妙的有可能令讀者會錯意，

但後面提到父親前妻的臉孔表情時，
卻能適當的給會錯意(或還未明)的讀者，
有一定程度的意料之外。
1 year agoReply
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有些部份，不確定是不是多打或選字意外，

「在跟蹤父親被」、「根夢境」

這兩個部份。
1 year agoReply
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