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朝花夕拾 sponsored 500coins for Issue 14!
9 months agoReply
魯嚕嚕
感謝朝花大大打賞！😁

希洛可以多幫夏奇薇雅買本書了🥰
9 months agoReply
朝花夕拾
@魯嚕嚕,一定要的！看來只有我站父女戀了（？咦
9 months agoReply
朝花夕拾
坐在自己懷中!!!這養成系!!!我不管了～
9 months agoReply
魯嚕嚕
唉呀，光源氏計畫被朝花大大發現了😏
9 months agoReply
TING
希洛其實很適合當爸爸，體貼、細心、溫柔、有耐性這些特徵他全部都有🥰
特別抱著夏奇薇雅讀書的部分更加有父女日常的感覺😆🫶🏻
11 months agoReply
魯嚕嚕
真的～😊
只是希洛還不願承認XD
畢竟他還年輕且「單身」，突然蹦一個孩子出來，要他就這樣當爸，他實在轉換不過來🤣
11 months agoReply
夜臨 Yalin Hayami
之前看到忘了講，這邊連續九行對話句有點太多了，中間畫面會跑掉，差不多四五行就能加一次敘述，或者在對話句結尾補一點角色描述也可以。

前面希洛跟老闆娘的對話也曾有類似情況，或許能考慮增補一下。
1 year agoReply
魯嚕嚕
感謝提醒，包括前一篇希洛與老闆娘的對話部分，都已進行調整囉～還順便修了一個視角的問題XD
1 year agoReply
羽璇
很期待薇雅的能力是什麼!!
希洛肯定只能當白臉爸爸XDD
剛好艾麗媽媽可以兇一點(?)
1 year agoReply
魯嚕嚕
艾麗對小孩應該也是挺心軟的～XD從第一部開頭她對求救小女孩的態度可見一斑。
1 year agoReply
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