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凌夏
首先，排版有很大的問題，句尾的標點符號都不見了，上下引號內的結尾也沒有句號，排版是最基本也是寫文章的潛規則，沒有排版就像是沒有骨頭的軀體，讓人沒有很想去深入閱讀。還有文筆有進步，但描述人物和隨從還是有待加強，滿分十分，我給五分，還未及格。再努力磨練技巧吧！加油！
3 years agoReply
林寒辰
我正需要這種建議！
關於排版下集我試試看
文筆我也要照你的建議試試，真的有好一點
謝謝你！

3 years agoReply
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