This chapter was pretty good; I like it! I would just say that while tense stays the same throughout one chapter, it does switch between multiple chapters. Like how this chapter was past tense but there were others that were present tense. I would suggest just sticking to a specific tense for the whole story and keeping it consistent this time over chapters. But the chapters uploaded today were very entertaining to read! :)
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This chapter was pretty good; I like it! I would just say that while tense stays the same throughout one chapter, it does switch between multiple chapters. Like how this chapter was past tense but there were others that were present tense. I would suggest just sticking to a specific tense for the whole story and keeping it consistent this time over chapters. But the chapters uploaded today were very entertaining to read! :)
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(P.S, Prepare to have your OTP challenged next chapter...)
(Also I’m now scared; idk what’s gonna happen to Bergamon (BergamotxCardamon) but I’ll stick around to find out!)