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kikii
評語很貼主題的一份作品，大部分地方都挑不出大毛病。
有些個人認為作品​​美中不足的地方，僅供參考。

第一：文中主角和浩然的塑造偏多，心怡和凱琳的塑造太薄。

第二：結局的斷點有點突然，我有點意猶未盡（？），感覺不應該就斷在那個地方。個人認為後面應該用主角的心理描寫結尾比較好。

最後，感謝帶來作品~
7 months agoReply
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