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陽壽木魚
心得：
看到#3
呃，有點像是校園回憶錄，雖然內容還算有趣但一章太短了。不太像小說。

然後（前面，應該是第一章）一章突然出現好幾個角色，形象跟名字有點難做連結⋯
建議作者可以試著讓角色在不同的事件出場，然後多描寫一點他們的個性會比較清楚：）
10 months agoReply
瑤亦瑤
人物介紹有寫她們的綽號和真名。



因為這是我第一部作品，還有很多不懂得，謝謝你的建議，我之後會改進
10 months agoReply
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