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鶄 sponsored 500coins for Issue 12!
1 year agoReply
菜根
謝謝打賞XD
1 year agoReply
鶄
非常感謝菜根的評價！看來結論是節奏上太慢，主題表達問題，還有點掛羊頭賣狗肉的感覺。我會把作者和角色互動情節的優次放高，令他們可以食對貨品。

昨日剛剛在被朋友勸過不要寫太多的字(和太多情節，通病)。之前是認為情節多一點是能豐富內容，結果是相反。看來我感覺可以把大部分的情節減縮至一兩句的文字來表達。

再一次感謝你的耐心和付出的時間，我下次改好還是要來的啊 >:)
1 year agoReply
菜根
好的~感謝你的參與~
1 year agoReply
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