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茗那
✎﹏ 一點簡單的評語外送 ‧⁺ ⊹˚.

可以說話了！？
主人只有一句話，氣場和個性卻都用其他方式描寫得很好，像是主角的想法和作為。難怪能訓練出乖狗狗，就是要夠狠吶 :3
11 months agoReply
月穎靈
我徹底忘記我剪了他舌頭！！！（抱頭www
11 months agoReply
茗那
竟然是忘記嗎www 
11 months agoReply
AnFr安鍅
評語：整體來說很新穎，故事排序很有衝擊力，給人很強的共鳴感。唯一的缺點是，主角在故事前段就已經失去言語與聆聽的能力，但在後段卻可以聽到他人的聲音、自己說話（個人推測），建議可以寫入主角是透過讀唇語的方式解讀他人的話語，以及透過主角的心聲來了解、呈現主角的處境以及心境。
11 months agoReply
月穎靈
欸欸欸欸欸對耶！我忘記我們家主角聽不到了XDDDD
11 months agoReply
AnFr安鍅
@月穎靈,WWWWW
11 months agoReply
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