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七日夏
竟然是武俠風！

其實我對這種風格沒什麼研究，最多也只看過金庸，但有一點我是可以確定的，那就是戰鬥中對方的回應太過淡泊，如果我沒有看到後面還以為他在跟幽靈打呢！

你有描述了他閃過的結果，過程卻不見一點，感覺沒頭沒尾的，看上去少了點帶入感。
9 years agoReply
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