Yep, I saw it after i posted this, i entered another contest for the fun of it, good luck to you -- authors ain't made, they are born, like Stephen King
Interesting take on the narrative. Maybe for next time when you swap into another character's perspective describe it a bit more because it's easy to get confused. Otherwise well written.
@wackydo,I know the feeling, that's why I try my best to leaves comments where I can. The results have already been posted, if you look at the closing comment of the contest you will see it. To see positions just go to the option before the prompt to see the drop list of all the stories. Keep up the good work!